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April 21, 2004
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You compose your conversations.
Fitfully gesturing with whatever you hold,
ending arguments with a flourish.
Make a point, now whirl, quickly.
Make it impossible to counter with your unpunctuation.
You duck and weave, spin, sidestep, pirouette:
One, two, one, two, faster, harder, stronger.
You leave me confused and two steps back,
just far enough behind to appear lost and unsure.
And if I catch up, if I make a point,
you spin again, a trail of words falling like pixie dust
as you make your escape.
And as you storm out, you slam the period behind you,
Ending your sentence with a door.
And I must follow you, my thuds down the stairs preceding my statement,
trying to catch up before the page break.
Now I capitalize a W, and follow with an a, i, t.
And you pause, spin, speak, gesture, spin, continue.
A waltz to counter my four-four.

You don't dance your words-
you speak a dance.
You speak a dance Baryshnikov couldn't follow.
You rapidly reverse the rhythm,
changing tempo in a blur of sound,
conducting your opus with hands to match.
Then, as you end your symphony, you bow.
You bow your head, turn on the car, and drive away.
And my two left feet shuffle me back inside,
your concert still ringing in my ears.
A piece about an argument I had with an ex-girlfriend.
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Edited: Replaced "haphazardly" with "Fitfully." Corrected spelling on "rhythm"

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Given 2005-04-05
I dance in clown shoes. by *zephyrkinetic *zephyrkinetic's piece about an argument he had with an ex-girlfriend is hilarious. Casting himself in the clown role of the title, he's completly dumbfounded by the rhythm and complexity of words dancing from his partners mouth. ( Suggested by themainliner and Featured by jasonvelocity )

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Ichors Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2010
Although from the title I thought the narrative would concentrate more on your clumsiness rather than your ex's eloquence, this does not hinder my will to favourite.
zephyrkinetic Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2010
I think I may well have been trying for an implication of irony, but it has been quite a very long time, so I honestly can't quite remember.
Something to do with my inability to properly keep pace.

Thank you for the favorite, also.
cleopandasaur Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2009
So beautiful! ^^
AstroBadger Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2009
Im sorry, I cannot offer any helpful input, but I very much love your poem!

So much so, that I am very cautiously asking if I could use it for my Literature Project in English class.

zephyrkinetic Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2009
Two questions:

What does said project entail, and what grade (form, year, etc) are you?

Also, if you're going to use my shit, I require that you get 100% on the project; that means polishing up that punctuation.
AstroBadger Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2009
The project? To find a poem that seems to have literary merit. It had to be written in the past ten years. I'm in my last year of highschool, AP Literature.

Very sorry, no offense, but I chose not to use your poem for the project.

I couldn't possibly give your work proper justice.
zephyrkinetic Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2009

Ah well. I'd have told you to go ahead. Its not as if its terribly good, but whatever.

On the other hand, people who are good at grammar should find themselves in #NaziPit.

Consider that.
Tirith-Nightly Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2008
Amazing. You have a hell of a way with words.
zephyrkinetic Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2008
Thank you.
MoonWhisperxxx Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2008  Student General Artist
Another piece that just leaves our minds resonating. Well applied, well titled, well read.
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